Checkov's gun went off, in The Soul Blade Chapter 29.
The pacing issue is still around. While Tricia is handling the heavy lifting for the plot, Brenna is waiting for her cue. Problem is, the story is Brenna's, not Tricia's, so there is a lot being shown of the Hallidays and their lives. Tricia gets to violate the laws of nature. Brenna gets forced out of the house by her own sister.
Brenna not being a morning person surprised me. Part of it may be that ghosts are more active at night, so that can mess up Brenna's sleep patterns. She also doesn't have to be up early for any reason, unlike her father, who works, and her sister, who has classes. Brenna can avoid the early morning chaos and eat breakfast at a leisurely pace instead of having to scarf down a couple slices of toast while filling a thermos with coffee. What work Brenna does have is freelance; as long as it gets done, the hours aren't as important.
Fabric stores are money drains for people who sew. My mother quilted. She would often go to a fabric store to get something for a one quilt and come back with fabric that she thought she could use for future projects. Cosplayers tend to be the same. Fabric stores are like live mouse traps to them. Brenna isn't just thinking of the work she needs to complete, but of future possibilities. She really should have an Etsy shop.
Tricia used the gun she picked up at the end of Chapter 28 I hope Fiona's demise wasn't telegraphed too hard. Tricia planned to have Fiona as the last sacrifice. The shock of betrayal in the dispatched soul would have an exquisite taste, or so Tricia believes. The portal opened. Partially. Tricia siphoned off a bit of each soul for her own misuse. She assumed that the ashen man would do to her what she would do to him if their positions were reversed. To be fair, she was correct. Evil doesn't share power well with others. The ashen man was going to kill her, though he'd never tell her that.
The question of how to show what the ashen man is saying inside Tricia's head was one I had to consider during NaNo. The original work has the interior dialogue marked as italics. I've used italics in the past to show what a character is thinking, notably in Subject 13. With that as a precedent, I wanted to clearer that it was the ashen man and not Tricia speaking. The temporary solution is a font change. I have no idea if it works, so let me know.
Friday, power corrupts; absolute power is nifty, in The Soul Blade Chapter 30.
Also Friday, over at Psycho Drive-In, Hanna-Barbera's Godzilla.
Saturday, over at The Seventh Sanctum, Jem and the Holograms.