tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post6862328764981386668..comments2021-05-16T13:41:12.015-04:00Comments on The Chaos Beast: The Soul Blade Chapter 29 - CommentaryScott Delahunthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06735796666483741699noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post-19668099149045320862017-05-09T18:26:53.578-04:002017-05-09T18:26:53.578-04:00It is padding. I was floundering to keep Brenna i...It is padding. I was floundering to keep Brenna in her own story here, and this was the result. ^_^;; At least Brenna being a night owl by necessity works.<br /><br />Tricia wanted to see the look of shock and betrayal, but I guess I didn't put that in. She wanted to make the last death extra spicy with those emotions from her victim. With Fiona being her last victim needed, Tricia is getting a little careless and power hungry. I had the tarp there, then forgot about it. ^.^;; The dangers of writing in spurts without looking back.<br /><br />Oh, good, something worked. :) He could have, but that throws off the ritual, which has a specific number for a reason. Magic gets fussy about numbers. Yay for the font change. Evil beings use Courier when occupying someone else's head. :) I'm keeping the font change, then.<br /><br />Now that he has something close to what he wants, he knows that the Bladekeeper can stop him, while before, killing Brenna would just complicate matters. It's not so much what she could do before, but once things go public, and world domination tends to make the news, he's expecting supernatural resistance.Scott Delahunthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06735796666483741699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post-89363074099975390892017-05-07T16:04:44.488-04:002017-05-07T16:04:44.488-04:00Why should Brenna be a morning person? The ghost a...Why should Brenna be a morning person? The ghost activity thing does make some sense. As to the fabric, it feels like that might have flowed better if it had been intentional. The fact that she randomly pulled over made it feel more like padding. Though it's cool to see the realism behind it here. (I am not one with fabric.)<br /><br />I wouldn't say Fiona's death was telegraphed, but it lacked the emotional impact it could have. We really didn't get to know much about her, whether she would be missed (I guess not), or even what overtime she'd been doing. The death didn't even really add to Tricia's character for me, except in that I guess she reacts the same whether it's a stranger dying or not. It was just there. Also, why the gun? (I guess Tricia's not a knife thrower, but she could have been standing at the door, and she was fast enough to not have her prior victims scream... if it was about spatter, she ended up changing clothes anyway.) For that matter, why do this at the office? She must know where Fiona lives, and she seemed keen on hauling the tarp regardless. Actually, why the tarp again, not talking on the desktop?<br /><br />The betrayal and counterpoint was well done. I wonder, could Ashen have not simply asked for a tenth victim, to replenish the missing essence? The font change also works really well, in my opinion, and would probably be even more effective if it was used for his speech all the way through. That not only makes it seamless, but adds another 'otherworldly' quality.<br /><br />I *do* question why Ashen says they must deal with the "meddling Bladekeeper". The only thing she's done to "meddle" was delay the doctor's secretary, and then fight back under direct attack as substitute victim, all of which was accidental. There's been literally nothing in the days since then. It could be that Ashen knows she'll be able to do something in the unspecified plan to come, but if so, then why only raise this as an issue now? Moreover, for all he knows, she left on a road trip to New York days earlier. Anyway, the pacing is picking up.GregThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17689711881670288362noreply@blogger.com