I've moved some long stuff off screen. Caitlin threatening the juniors, I felt, is best left implied instead of shown. No one really needs a chapter with Caitlin just ripping into younger girls like a drill sergeant. The Jennifers returning Autumn was also left off-screen. Having Autumn appear tied to a bed lets the audience have their imaginations run away with themselves. The opening scene shows that Caitlin will focus on her needs, including putting herself ahead of her roommates. Sure, she didn't know Autumn had been returned for a refund, but stopping to do her English homework while two of her roommates are the prisoners of the Jennifers is Caitlin taking full advantage of the situation for her benefit.
Down in the Lair of the Jennifers, Laura's still investigating. Being new herself, Laura doesn't get that the Jennifers are the school's version of a Star Trek redshirt. Thus, the nameless, faceless horde who would've had a different look each time one of them appeared if this was a webcomic starts to get names and individualized. Not the intention when I started, but that's how the story evolved. So far, it's just Jenn and Kristie, but now that I've started, Laura will meet others as needed.
Jenn is serious about keeping Laura until her missing classmates are back. Laura has reasons for not wanting to disappear, specifically, the trial against her father. Jenn also has noticed that Laura doesn't treat the Jennifers like everyone else her age does. Laura makes a point of learning people's names. Her little bit on politeness is based on events that have happened in Ontario; it is not unknown for gangs to murder rivals and leave them in fields.
Juliana's footlocker wasn't planned, but came from needing to keep the story moving. I had an idea of what happened, now was the time to start revealing. Juliana's belongings became key. As Laura explains, there's a difference between leaving willingly and being forced. If a girl was allowed to get some of her things before being taken away, she might leave a clue behind, either something of hers that she's never seen without or making a point to be messier or neater than normal. A girl who leaves of her own free will is just grabbing her good stuff. Laura's reasoning is filtered through her background. She may have thought about the situation a little much.
The last sentence of the chapter is Laura starting to get into how life at the Academy works. There's something she wants, there's something Jenn wants, there's room for negotiations. Poor, Jenn. Laura is scaring her, more than Caitlin ever could.
Saturday, over at MuseHack, The Equalizer.
Also Saturday, check out Comics Bulletin for comics-related reposts of Lost in Translation.