21 Nov 2013

Lethal Ladies #15 - Commentary

As always, please read the chapter first.

For a change of pace, the first scene is all done from Sexton's point of view.  I wanted to show his reaction instead of Rose's, even though Rose has gone on the offensive.  I probably wouldn't go this route now and leave the focus on Rose.  However, at the time, I was picturing this as being filmed.  The other bit of challenge here is to just have Sexton's side of the conversation without him repeating what Rose is saying.  Ideally, readers can figure out what Rose said just from reading Sexton's half.  The ballpark is Busch Stadium, home of the St. Louis Cardinals baseball team.

Meanwhile, Elena returned to the Wal-Mart.  Again, it amused me to have a former Russian agent using the store as a front.  The core of Sexton's plot gets pointed out - an attack on an American ally would provoke the ally and others in NATO to react.  Elena's request for guns comes from not having access to the firearms owned by her and Rose's agency.  She's assuming that the office and her home are under surveillance, and she needs weapons before the cool down period ends.  The MAC-11 is an American machine pistol and can be, with the right skills and tools, be converted to full automatic fire.  Elena prefers it to regular pistols when she has a choice.

Most of the chapter is setting up what was planned to be the climax of the story.  There's a catch, which will be touched upon in the coming weeks.  Just keep in mind what the goal of NaNoWriMo is - 50 000 words in 30 days.  You don't need to count; the story is nowhere near at the end of Chapter 15.

Tomorrow, Rose's plan shifts into gear.
Saturday, over at MuseHack, the adaptational news round up continues.
Coming soon, a NaNoWriMo update.

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