tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post5602547125789269996..comments2021-05-16T13:41:12.015-04:00Comments on The Chaos Beast: Unruly: The New Girl - Chapter 4Scott Delahunthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06735796666483741699noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post-30611301831071761982015-03-16T17:47:12.990-04:002015-03-16T17:47:12.990-04:00Sure, thanks. ^_^;;
That may have not been the wor...Sure, thanks. ^_^;;<br />That may have not been the word I wanted. I was thinking along the lines of a deeper voice but still feminine, like what you'd hear from a femme fatale. Husky doesn't work, either.<br /><br />Flora turned out to be the pop culture fan of the cast. :) Still, wait until you meet her sister's bird. Laura is making an effort to remember who is who, not realizing that she's probably the only one to make that effort, especially for the twins.Scott Delahunthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06735796666483741699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post-59704101082236138982015-03-16T09:20:06.218-04:002015-03-16T09:20:06.218-04:00Uh, do you want little grammar and continuity issu...Uh, do you want little grammar and continuity issues pointed out?<br />“she heard a dusky girl’s voice”: If Laura can’t see the girl, how can she know the skin colour?<br />“She ran towards the where she thought the noises came from.”: Extra ‘the’. Also ‘had come’ from seems closer, as the noises had stopped.<br /><br />Slappy Squirrel. Uh huh. ;) Incidentally, Laura has a better memory than me for names. Admittedly, that’s not hard.Gregory Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06547180132612659893noreply@blogger.com