tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post2437643501701234320..comments2021-05-16T13:41:12.015-04:00Comments on The Chaos Beast: Subject 13 #22 - CommentaryScott Delahunthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06735796666483741699noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post-22647788507374336512013-08-20T20:24:51.463-04:002013-08-20T20:24:51.463-04:00It took me time to piece together Anne's name ...It took me time to piece together Anne's name again in the commentaries. It was a fluke, unintentional, but I may have heard ads for her movie. In a way, the commentaries are a serial, too; though, this time, I should be able to go back a week to see if I mentioned something.<br /><br />Nasty's surprised because she didn't think two new girls would act that way so fast. There's only so much research that can be done; again, in 2001, the amount of detail needed and available online wasn't as great as today. Fake IDs are harder to do now. And, yes, there are two all-girls schools.<br /><br />At this point, the best explanation I have is that Anne works in mysterious ways. Anne is more aware of what's going on than Nasty could imagine. Issue 29 goes further with the idea you mentioned - Jessica really should go to school.<br /><br />Anne is using Jessica the best way she knows. Jessica can pass as a student because she's the right age. Next best choice is Micki, who really didn't get fully developed yet. Edward's a good guess, really. :) (Again, there are details that would fit best under an American Eagle serial that just don't fit in Subject 13.)<br /><br />They're sort of in the background right now. They'll make cameos later, but I wanted an arc where Nasty could focus on one problem instead a number. They just sort of fell in the cracks for a bit; they didn't fit with the current storyline, but still count towards Nasty's disadvantages.<br /><br />I like to use real cities - maps are easier to make - but once there, create a school that is fictional to avoid people pointing out errors. As long as the school feels right, differences get chalked up to being a different school.Scott Delahunthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06735796666483741699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post-15474216410426980332013-08-20T15:18:17.904-04:002013-08-20T15:18:17.904-04:00Nailed it in one! I was hoping you'd start by ...Nailed it in one! I was hoping you'd start by addressing the name that caused my eyebrows to go up. You've started to repeat yourself btw - the pants option was mentioned last time. You've mentioned the feeling exposed and mother comparisons before too. The dangers of a serial, I'm sitting here going "yeah... I know... what else is new..." Granted sometimes it's warranted, like the Seward name thing, which I remember you saying before but the details eluded me.<br /><br />Regards plot. First, I'm waffling on you recapping, since technically there were six days in there, but for me it was six minutes. I'm coming down on the side of okay, but there's much BIGGER questions I wished had been answered. For instance:<br />-Why is it news to Nasty that Emily and Cynthia are "new" students? What happened to the Foundation doing research? Getting a list of all new enrollments? Or STAFF? For that matter, why is she so sure the students are at this school? Weren't there two all-girls in the area? Is someone else on assignment there?<br />-Why doesn't Jessica have a better cover story? WHAT COVER STORY HAS SHE BEEN USING WITH THE FOUNDATION? Why is she back to school on ASSIGNMENT, as opposed to back to school because, well, she doesn't have a high school diploma yet? She doesn't seem like she's very good at coming up with stuff on the fly, so again, Foundation: easiest organization to infiltrate ever.<br />-Why *is* she on assignment? Micki just gave her a talking to saying she "has to maintain equipment" has "has to know where Peregrine is AT ALL TIMES" - how can she accomplish those things while on assignment?! If she's obviously not, WHO is doing it in her absence? Edward? (By the way, I'd forgotten about his earlier appearance, that was another good call before).<br />-Where is the Consortium? They never said they're backing off, in fact, they sent three guys. With the addition of another school here, I'm starting to feel a bit like I've entered PART II of a series without finishing PART I. (Which is mitigated somewhat by Nasty's comparisons and regrets.) You say later issues reveal if Nasty can stop the Pyro twins, I call duh, and want to know about the guys from Issues 1-15.<br /><br />I'll conclude on a good note, I liked the remarks about creating your own school as referenced in the last commentary. It also avoids people saying "but it's not quite like that!" or "did you put me into this story?!".Gregory Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06547180132612659893noreply@blogger.com