tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post3960139578119621017..comments2021-05-16T13:41:12.015-04:00Comments on The Chaos Beast: The Soul Blade - Chapter 37Scott Delahunthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06735796666483741699noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post-8223851898549289462017-06-12T17:51:34.798-04:002017-06-12T17:51:34.798-04:00Evacuating might be stretching, yeah. It came dow...Evacuating might be stretching, yeah. It came down in my head on what would be the safest choice - getting everyone out now or making sure no one came outside. With just three officers, both are difficult. I also didn't want potential hostages beyond Brenna's family. The news should be covering the dead walking again, though, so most of the neighbours will be aware of what's going on.<br /><br />Matt leapt to a conclusion that Brenna's the one in danger, but when you have a girlfriend with a mystic laser sword and undead marching to her neighbourhood, it's a fairly good guess. He just didn't know about the rest of the family.<br /><br />I need McCoy in one last time. Yeah, his case is wrapped up now, though next chapter creates more problems for him. Thanks for reminding me of him. Again, loose ends kept me from figuring out the resolution for a few years. ^_^;;<br /><br />Henderson turned out to be fun to write. He's got the stone face facade you expect from a hard-ass cop, but he's showing depths.<br /><br />Brenna did yell, but Rae did notice the police car arriving and was near the front. And she was having a bit of fun at Grace's expense.<br /><br />It's something that I see in similar works - the police are usually outmatched because they don't have the abilities the heroes do. Brenna is genre savvy here, thanks to Joni.<br /><br />At some point, Brenna is going to bed Matt, but not this story. Rae's empathy isn't always handy. :) But it felt like the right way to go in the chapter. Brenna gets her hot kiss in, and the relationship's arc is essentially done for the story and everyone is happy except for Rae, who needs brain bleach.<br /><br />Brenna never told Gary about being attacked in the parking lot. She kept him in the dark, so she's just a witness, not the victim.<br /><br />Gary and Keith are more loose ends. Yeah, they're not going to run, but they are getting people out and staying out of the line of fire for now. They should reappear.<br /><br />Ah, those skeletons are spoilers for Chapter 38. :)Scott Delahunthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06735796666483741699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post-75903121453595811512017-06-11T19:19:53.983-04:002017-06-11T19:19:53.983-04:00First, it's awesome that this is getting some ...First, it's awesome that this is getting some resolution. Good on you for going for it. A few thoughts, because I can, knowing I'm just one person.<br /><br />-Evacuating the neighbourhood strains credulity to me (particularly that it seems to happen so fast, does no one in the neighbourhood own a toddler?). It's not like there's a bomb going off, it's an army that doesn't fight you unless provoked, one that you will have to get PAST in order to evacuate. Shelter in place makes more sense to me, like in schools when you lock the door, turn off the lights and pretend you're not home. Get everyone inside, do not go out to shop for groceries, etc.<br /><br />Alternately, evacuating Brenna HERSELF makes some sense, since she's presumably the target, and I imagine her family wouldn't let her leave alone. (Also, we know the family is a target too.) So the dialogue with Matt and the Hallidays makes sense, but clearing the block doesn't.<br /><br />-It seems a shame not to get McCoy's take on some of this (though he gets a reference next week)... in particular, these are skeletons, and his whole case has been about missing bones. Someone HAS to make a connection, right? To the demon release? And I think he's the only one who can do it (well, Brenna, but she's distracted, her friends, who aren't there, and maybe Kirk, who we don't see much of).<br /><br />A few specifics too...<br />-Henderson and 'blunt weapons', heh.<br />-Does Brenna have better lungs than I think? It's said she's out at the curb when she yells back at Rae. Or did Rae come to the front door? Also, when she tells Rae to "get Dad and Summer", will she bring Keith? (versus 'my Dad')<br />-Grace inviting skeletons, hahaha.<br />-It's a good point about them likely protecting the police instead.<br />-Matt has a point about a time and place, but I can see it in character. The interplay here works, and helps cement the relationship.<br />-"I didn't want to worry Daddy"? He was there when Officer Cruz was there. I mean, I guess he thought Brenna was only a witness? Either way, I could see them not mentioning it to Dawn.<br />-Did Gary actually evacuate with Piper, Yesi and Keith? Even if Dawn and the others wanted confirmation (and then decided not to go), I somehow can't see him leaving his daughters behind.<br />-Won't some skeletons be able to sneak up behind them, if they were vectoring in from two directions? The last scene works well though, particularly the red blade. Looking forward to more.GregThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17689711881670288362noreply@blogger.com