tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post1600729345763840160..comments2021-05-16T13:41:12.015-04:00Comments on The Chaos Beast: Beaver Flight Chapter 8 - CommentaryScott Delahunthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06735796666483741699noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6464382918796251124.post-30581939371230929592015-02-16T10:59:01.041-05:002015-02-16T10:59:01.041-05:00I don't know that the format is wrong. I do th...I don't know that the format is wrong. I do think that time skips are needed (so good job here), which may be why a serial format "feels" natural, but novels don't grind through every single day. It's not like you're completely switching up the secondary cast, or shifting the focus back and forth between squads. As to the visual medium, I think writers have their own tricks (like your reiterating the phrasing for rewinding a playback) that still allows for reader imagination.<br /><br />I cannot speak to whether anyone found "loonie" confusing. The action worked a lot better here than it did with the "Roo"s (and I find it interesting that, if anything, the invaders have scaled back their tactics, no longer in an "arm ripping" mood), so that was good. Tori's maintained her enthusiasm, but is now willing to follow orders. I find it curious that the invaders released the pod person before appearing themselves, and in two different locations. I think there's something to the idea of the "new" team being investigated. From the reader standpoint, the detectors were either liable to work or fail spectacularly, so it's good to see that pay off. None of them seems too traumatized by the encounter either, though I imagine it helps that Renee wasn't in the thick of things.<br /><br />Plotwise, the idea that Darcy was violating an unwritten rule creates possible conflict, and the return of a "survivor" makes things interesting, as did the meeting of commanders (though I got crossed up at one point when two people that I thought were on opposite sides of the room tapped shoulders or something). I do think the chapter would have ended better there, rather than with the mail call - the hints about what they'd been doing with their off time had been enough for me, and I'm not sure how much all the "Canada Day" stuff would resonate.<br /><br />Plus, July 4 is just three days later, and you KNOW the Americans would be on that, but there's no mention of whether they had plans, or whether a joint celebration on, say, the 2nd would be in order. Coupled with the meeting, it gives the sense that the Canadians have been isolating themselves for some reason, like they're a "rogue" group, and the very last sentence does nothing to counter that opinion.Gregory Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06547180132612659893noreply@blogger.com